NeonSprinkes

I like it, but I think it needs more description like is this person in love or are they just really good friends that have spilt up? if they are in love explain why or try and give us an indication of how it has affected that person.

the best example of this is the first few lines of the origin of love.

Love is a drug and you are my cigarette

Love is addiction and you are my Nicorette

Love is a drug, like chocolate, like cigarettes

I feel sick got to medicate myself.

this explains that this person is missing or loves another person terribly that they are craving for them.

Yes. Its just a girl thing. Its a pop song, not a slow song, I feel that it should not be changed, since it was the first song I EVER wrote. I wrote it when I was seven

I don't really think it could work, as to me piles of snow is just a lump of stationary snow, whereas waves indicate they are flowing, and don't stop for anyone or anything

Exactly, just like avalanches. They don't stop for s***

Sure

Sometimes I break the rules its risky but its true. I have so many secrets that I wont tell you. But I know you try so I go easy on you. /ts fine ya its fine. Cud I do what I do

Chorus

Sometimes I make mistakes but I know that I cant stop there. Sometimes we go too far just quit and then we,sit down and forget, but i Don't wanna forget so-o I'm gonna do it again oh again

Sometimes when I do the math it just does-nt add u-u-u-up so I feel like just going home. If I close my eyes and I think I might just fall asleep, so to stay awake, I have to think life is a piece of ca-e-a-ake

Chorus

You-ooh cant stop there we have to share our life a promise we made but I just do not care if you don't think its fair-air-air

Softer

Sometimes I make mistakes but I know that I cant stop there

Louder

I don't wanna forget!x3

Softer

Lets just, do it again

Waves of snow, in an avalanche the snow moves like waves of water down the mountain

What about piles?

Sure and in this case it's more of broken love as they have "fallen" down the slippery slope and is on the ground unable to get back up.

It's quite depressing now that I think about it xD

Ya... wanna hear/ see one of my songs?

I think a few changes to verse 1 could be made like, you feel like you're on top of a mountain "top" "and" you scream and shouttillsuddenly the mountain moves and you're buried "beneath" piles of snow. taking on too much than you can handle is what I did today. And maybe instead of taking on too much than you can handle is what I did today it could be "I took on you're love, but lost as the waves drew closer to me." perhaps?

Waves? What about snow?

Hmm you're right about the "white monster" but I don't think "I never knew I could go through that much for you" could do it, as I'm imagining the mountain as the person that the climber falls in love with and the snow as a symbol of that love falling apart (as love is a slippery slope) and the "avalanche" as a symbol of love suffocating that person

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If you know what I mean xD

Lets just leave it like that. Once we write more we might get an idea and we can edit it. Wanna see some of MY songs? I don't care if mika uses them*hinthint*

also if the snow represents their love falling apart and hes covered with snow is he covered with love or broken love??? xD

and my line says (to me) that:

I would do anything for you, fall down a mountain, stand in an avalanche, I would about your name from the rooftops.

Verse1

you feel likeyou'reon top of a mountain you scream and shouttillsuddenly the mountain moves and you're buried underneath piles of snow. taking on too much than you can handle is what I did today.

Chorus

I scream and shout--so loud that that im buried in memories that flash before me suffocating me your love has the heat to melt this avalanche away from me

Verse2

Your the mountain I tried to take on but I slipped and fell hitting every rock on the way down I never knew I could go through that much for you

I do indeed!, also what about "You're the mountain I tried to take on but I slipped and fell, tumbling, falling hitting every rock on the way down whilst a white monster descended on me."

I like every part about it except whilst a white monster decended on me.

How about:

Your the mountain I tried to take on but I slipped and fell hitting every rock on the way down I never knew I could go through that much for you.

You seem quite full of idea's which is great for writing in general

I have an a in writing class!

I quite like that as a chorus, but still needs a whole lot of work.

Also I don't have a clue as to what I'm doing I'm just writing creatively, I have no musical training whatsoever and I'm studying journalism at college xD

I have musical experience in writing lyrics, I get bullied a lot and I have a hard life. I have lots of happy times too. I love music. So my love of music inspired this song that I wrote:

Where have I heard that melody inside my head or or on the radio I know I know its the melody of my heart its the melody of my soul so turn the radio on and play that track lets kick back

(Chorus)

And go-oh-oh turn the radio on right now I wanna get back to being happy and so-oh-oh its time to make the right choice Sing it out loud lets go oh-oh lets go

I t-t-turn on the radio hear our song and I know you called and I hear the phone ring.Its you hello how do you do? Lets hang

(Chorus)

Verse3

And if you get tired of the same old song on the radio you know I know change the Channel

(Chorus)

Nonsense!

I may be in college but I wouldn't have come up with that sentance with out your original input

Thanks! My dad used to be in a band. He sings a lot so I get my inspiration from his career.

Avalanche: you feel likeyou'reon top of a mountain you scream and shouttillsuddenly the mountain moves and you're buried underneath piles of snow. taking on too much than you can handle is what I did today. I scream and shout-- so loud that that im buried in memories that flash before me suffocating me your love has the heat to melt this avalanche away from me

I edited each post we made so it fit in the song and this is what we have so far. You like?

Loving it already

But maybe have, why don't you come and melt the snow that surrounds me suffocating every scream I make, every call for you as your love has the heat I need to free me from this avalanche?

You are a way better writer than me. Then again, your in college, I'm in elementary.

Sure but not right now as I have college in about 7 hours xD

But I can give some words or themes

Avalanche: you feel like you're on top of a mountain you scream and shout till suddenly the mountain moves and you're buried underneath piles of snow.

I think that could create some interesting lyrics xD

-=1 beat

Continuing "avalanche": taking on too much than you can handle is what I did today. The I scream and shout-- so loud that the avalanche is here to stay and buried in memories that flash before me

I scream and shout but you never come I cry your name and I sing my song so why don't you come the snow melts and I get up another avalanche of tears

I thought about giving Mika some idea's for new songs (that is if he does read this xD)

What do you guys think?

That's a great idea! I write songs (just lyrics) myself, but I don't think I'd be good at his kind of songs. Still, wanna brain storm together?

Bringing this back, because I LOVE sending and recieving letters.

Hi. What are we supposed to do in this forum?

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mika teatro faz parte do seu espirito , teatral,,,encanta, conquista...alcança e muito mais vc proprio ilumina , Luz, Camera , Ação.......Rodando...: Mikacool:

Eu amo suas habilidades de escrita

Do you have a scanner? I used to just scan my drawings but now I just take pics. Anyway,goodnight:bye:

I don't know what a scanner is.but nite- bite

We barely know each other aha,but yeah that's just the thing..most friends I have are from on here..

 

 

 

I've done some pretty good drawings (can see for yourself on my profile in the album drawings) but now am finding it hard to try draw Gaga :/

Ya...

My best drawing I cannot take a picture because I don't have a camera

I can't f*cking draw anymore...seriously.

Me either. Then again, I could never draw in the first place...

Sup Y'all

Sup B. Rachie.

Spelling check. I type rachie. In related words it says factor... Rachie=Factor?

I cooked spaghetti on the stove for the first time today, all by my self, I even cooked sausages and put them in the sauce :D:D

I'm pretty much done. Seriously everyone just wants me dead that way they don't have to put up with me so maybe I should just do something to myself...I'll hardly be missed.

I would miss you. Every one on MFC will miss you. Even if nobody at home treats you well, we will be here. We may be countries away, but we are friends and we'll stay that way for a long time.

Hey peoples. Came come sick. How is every1 else?

I studied the parts I failed yesterday.

It's the damn school signs that throw me off. I swear they weren't on my first test that I passed.

 

Yeah! And no. It's just the written. They're treating it as a permit test, kind of. If I fail one more time, I have to wait a month before taking it again.

What about the driven type test?