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You've done better then me, I try writing a song and I'll get halfway through and throw it away because I'm a sort of perfectionist when it comes to writing xD

I like it, but I think it needs more description like is this person in love or are they just really good friends that have spilt up? if they are in love explain why or try and give us an indication of how it has affected that person. the best example of this is the first few lines of the origin of love. Love is a drug and you are my cigarette Love is addiction and you are my Nicorette Love is a drug, like chocolate, like cigarettes I feel sick got to medicate myself. this explains that this person is missing or loves another person terribly that they are craving for them.

I don't really think it could work, as to me piles of snow is just a lump of stationary snow, whereas waves indicate they are flowing, and don't stop for anyone or anything

Sure

Waves of snow, in an avalanche the snow moves like waves of water down the mountain

Sure and in this case it's more of broken love as they have "fallen" down the slippery slope and is on the ground unable to get back up. It's quite depressing now that I think about it xD

I think a few changes to verse 1 could be made like, you feel like you're on top of a mountain "top" "and" you scream and shouttillsuddenly the mountain moves and you're buried "beneath" piles of snow. taking on too much than you can handle is what I did today. And maybe instead of taking on too much than you can handle is what I did today it could be "I took on you're love, but lost as the waves drew closer to me." perhaps?

Hmm you're right about the "white monster" but I don't think "I never knew I could go through that much for you" could do it, as I'm imagining the mountain as the person that the climber falls in love with and the snow as a symbol of that love falling apart (as love is a slippery slope) and the "avalanche" as a symbol of love suffocating that person . If you know what I mean xD

you did better then me then in English xD

I do indeed!, also what about "You're the mountain I tried to take on but I slipped and fell, tumbling, falling hitting every rock on the way down whilst a white monster descended on me."

You seem quite full of idea's which is great for writing in general

I quite like that as a chorus, but still needs a whole lot of work. Also I don't have a clue as to what I'm doing I'm just writing creatively, I have no musical training whatsoever and I'm studying journalism at college xD

Nonsense! I may be in college but I wouldn't have come up with that sentance with out your original input

Loving it already But maybe have, why don't you come and melt the snow that surrounds me suffocating every scream I make, every call for you as your love has the heat I need to free me from this avalanche?

Sure but not right now as I have college in about 7 hours xD But I can give some words or themes Avalanche: you feel like you're on top of a mountain you scream and shout till suddenly the mountain moves and you're buried underneath piles of snow. I think that could create some interesting lyrics xD

Sounds great I'd love to get involved

I thought about giving Mika some idea's for new songs (that is if he does read this xD) What do you guys think?

Umm not really sure what to put xD So I'll just put this... Well done for being you! That was terrible